Changeset 0898274 for introduction/common

Timestamp:

Jul 15, 2006, 9:20:45 AM (18 years ago)

Author:

Chris Staub <chris@…>

Children:

48ea888

Parents:

8d937fb3

Message:

Text fixes

Location:

introduction/common

Files:

• askforhelp.xml (modified) (3 diffs)
• how.xml (modified) (3 diffs)

introduction/common/askforhelp.xml

@@ -48 +48 @@
       <listitem>
         <para>The value of the $CLFS_HOST, $CLFS_TARGET, $BUILD32, and $BUILD64
-        enviornment variables.</para>
+        environment variables.</para>
       </listitem>
       <listitem>
@@ -60 +60 @@
       <listitem>
         <para>Note whether you have deviated from the book at all. A package
-        change or even a minor change to any command is considered deviation.
-        </para>
+        version change or even a minor change to any command is considered
+        deviation.</para>
       </listitem>
     </itemizedlist>
@@ -80 +80 @@
     <para>If something goes wrong while running the <command>configure</command>
     script, review the <filename>config.log</filename> file. This file may
-    contain the errors you encountered <command>configure</command>. This file
-    logs errors that may have not been printed to the screen. Include only the
-    <emphasis>relevant</emphasis> lines if you need to ask for help.</para>
+    contain the errors you encountered during <command>configure</command>.
+    It often logs errors that may have not been printed to the screen. Include
+    only the <emphasis>relevant</emphasis> lines if you need to ask for
+    help.</para>
 
   </sect2>

introduction/common/how.xml

@@ -21 +21 @@
   <para>As an alternative to installing an entire separate distribution
   onto your machine, you may wish to use the Linux From Scratch LiveCD.
-  The CD works well as a host system, providing all the tools you need to
-  successfully follow the instructions in this book. Additionally, it
-  contains all the source packages, patches and a copy of this book. So
-  once you have the CD, no network connection or additional downloads are
-  necessary. For more information about the LFS LiveCD or to download a copy,
-  visit <ulink url="&livecd-root;"/></para>
+  This CD works well as a host system, providing all the tools you need to
+  successfully follow the instructions in this book. It does also
+  contain source packages and patches for the LFS book, and a copy of the LFS
+  book, but not the needed packages or book for CLFS. You can still use the
+  CD for building CLFS, but you will need to download the packages, patches
+  and book separately. You can also look at
+  <ulink url="&hints-root;lfscd-remastering-howto.txt"/>
+  for infomation on building your own CD, replacing the LFS packages and book
+  with those for CLFS. Once you have the CD, no network connection or
+  additional downloads are necessary. For more information about the LFS
+  LiveCD or to download a copy, visit <ulink url="&livecd-root;"/>.</para>
 
   <para><xref linkend="chapter-partitioning"/> of this book describes how
@@ -48 +53 @@
   compiler.</para>
 
-  <para>The process of building cross-compile tools first involves installing
-  building all the necessary tools to create a build system for the target 
-  machine. With the Cross-Compiled tools we just created, we elminate any
+  <para>The process of building cross-compile tools first involves building and
+  installing all the necessary tools to create a build system for the target 
+  machine. With these cross-compiled tools, we eliminate any
   dependencies on the toolchain from our host distro.</para>
 
@@ -60 +65 @@
 
   <para>In <xref linkend="chapter-building-system"/>, the full CLFS system is
-  built. Depending on the system you are cross-compiling for, either you will
+  built. Depending on the system you are cross-compiling for, you will either
   boot the minimal temp-system on the target machine, or chroot into it.</para>